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Daddy, Why'd you leave?
You know I wasn't safe with her.
Why did you walk away?
Where you going with your gun,
--Daddy?
Are you coming home again?
Was it something mommy did?
Or something grandma said?
Why'd you tuck me in?
And kiss me on the head?
Please don't leave me,
--Daddy.
There're monsters under the bed.
Wait, come back,
Please don't shut the door.
I don't think I'm ready,
Not to see you anymore.
There's people out to get me,
People I can't see.
Why'd you leave me,
Daddy,
Some are right in front of me.
You know I wasn't safe with her.
Why did you walk away?
Where you going with your gun,
--Daddy?
Are you coming home again?
Was it something mommy did?
Or something grandma said?
Why'd you tuck me in?
And kiss me on the head?
Please don't leave me,
--Daddy.
There're monsters under the bed.
Wait, come back,
Please don't shut the door.
I don't think I'm ready,
Not to see you anymore.
There's people out to get me,
People I can't see.
Why'd you leave me,
Daddy,
Some are right in front of me.
This is a very personal piece. It speaks a bit in riddles to those who do not know my story behind the screen. However, for my readers I will simply say that I lost my father. He passed a way very instantly when I was fairly young. I guess in my older age, my unsettled and confusing past is coming up to haunt me.
--Feedback on the writing itself, style, or anything else would be nice. Please if your feedback is a bit more on the negative side please be constructive with it so I can better myself, not feel shitty. Thanks.
--Feedback on the writing itself, style, or anything else would be nice. Please if your feedback is a bit more on the negative side please be constructive with it so I can better myself, not feel shitty. Thanks.
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you might want to change there's monsters under the bed to there're, just a minor grammatical error 
other than that this is beautifuly done. every time I read it it's like peeling back another layer.
other than that this is beautifuly done. every time I read it it's like peeling back another layer.